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A-level Media Studies Project On Biketrials


Rich Pearson
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Eyup,

I need you fellas to give me a hand with summat if anyone’s got a few minutes to spare..

tv.isg.si link

Click on the above link and download the video titled Artefact First Draft. Its only a small file (10mb) and all the footage has been used before in my videos, but that’s not the point.

The point is that the video is a mock advertisement for a TV show about Biketrials. Please don’t get excited, I’m only making an advert, there’s no TV series coming, I wish it were different. Both the Interactive Visual Technologies Channel and Biketrials: A Sport Outside Society are complete fabrications to support this project and are completely fictious.

The reason I’ve made it is that its for my AS level media studies project on video production and I need some feedback from real people who know what they are talking about, and anyone who just has an opinion on what they liked about it, what they disliked, how they think it could be made better; I want to hear from anyone and everyone.

PLEASE DON’T: just post saying, “It’s Amazing!” or “It’s Shit!” I want to know what’s shit about it so’s I can make it better.

If you can help I’d be really appreciative. (Y)

Thanks

Rich

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The chunks are goooood :)

You need a new font mate (on the white writing in the begining), something a bit more fancy would be great. Also i'm not too keen on the voice over, it doesn't seen to fit in for an advert.

Maybe make the logo at the end for the tv channel a bit more prominent, try using a focal point in the image at the end, have something in the middle that the eye will be drawn to.

Otherwise ace vid mate, A++!

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Thats not fair! we have to make a childrens tv programe!

Looks good rich just need to clean up the vocals could be my pc but the music seemed to dominate it a bit.

I'd try and make my own font, that always looks more profesional and the into needs to be shortened.

And the clip of Alex at the start doesn't really link?? I'm not sure on that one

Chew on that Rich :P

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Was good, the idea and editing is top dog but the only real thing that stood out to me was your voice, as much as you may have a gentle, soft voice while making love to whiteboy in that I couldnt really tell what you were saying, seemed like you were a bit...shy :ermm:

Dunno, just maybe try re doing that bit and it's spot on (Y)

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Looks good rich just need to clean up the vocals could be my pc but the music seemed to dominate it a bit.

And the clip of Alex at the start doesn't really link?? I'm not sure on that one

Yeah was just talking to AndyT about the vocals and it was just really damn hard to record them without getting heaps of backgroud destortion. I'll have to play around with some of the synth levels and the volume to see if I can punch it up a bit. I'm also gonna see what its like with my girlfriend doing the voiceover as she has a slightly higher voice but more dynamic than mine.

the clip of Alex I just liked as it was someone alone and (quite literally at the time...) caught out which is what I was trying to get across with the whole 'no manager, no subs' thing. But I see where you're coming from.

Was good, the idea and editing is top dog but the only real thing that stood out to me was your voice, as much as you may have a gentle, soft voice while making love to whiteboy in that I couldnt really tell what you were saying, seemed like you were a bit...shy :ermm:

Dunno, just maybe try re doing that bit and it's spot on (Y)

Thanks Rob. I'll have to get my growl on for when I go over to see Whiteass later. (Y)

Rich

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yer i really liked it the as people have said before the black bits are abit annoying the voice is very muffled cant hear some of the stuff you are saying and also i would use a diffrent voice not because theres anything wrong with yours but yoru dialect of english just doesnt sound right maybe me just me but meh the rest of it was class!

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is good :D

just a couple o things though

font (N) - something a bit rougher like courier ? - with a filter so it looks typewritten maybe?

i didn't have sound but i wasn't getting much sense of impact when people crashed/landed on stuff. maybe zoom in on the impact point a bit like they do when people crash in those police chase programs??

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Great vid but i think its the same 3 things that everyone doesnt seem to like

  1. The Font - a little boring although nice and clear maybe could be changed, i really dont think the end slide works at all though.
  2. The Long Black gaps - a bit too long, i know its hard to get the right and feel and fit the music but this needs fiddling with...you want to show as many different sides of trials as possible, which are your decision in the end
  3. The Voice over - MAJOR PROBLEM - the voice really needs to be clear and powerful i feel, its ok by the sounds of it although the quality is terrible and i find it really hard to hear everything

The Voice is key so if you can manage to get that right the video/advert should be Mint!

Hope I've helped, good luck...

Steve (Y)

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Very nice!!

Same things, voice is hard to distinguish/long black outs

Few things I might add/change:

- I find slow motion is really nice when you are trying to accentuate something, maybe some of the big moves could be done in slow motion

- "is unrelenting" goes by really quickly and it would be cool if the music had a big punch as soon as it fades out, that point in the video seems sort of climactic to me...

Thanks, great video

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is good :D

just a couple o things though

font (N) - something a bit rougher like courier ? - with a filter so it looks typewritten maybe?

i didn't have sound but i wasn't getting much sense of impact when people crashed/landed on stuff. maybe zoom in on the impact point a bit like they do when people crash in those police chase programs??

NOOOOO! not courier. please. Its such a f**king cliche font

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Hey- just some quick input-

If you do change the font, try not to use a serif font, since the serifs themselves tend to wash out on TV sets. Sans is the way to go (Y)

Also, remember that ads tend not to describe the actual product, but rather the feeling that the user will get from owning it. Hence why car ads never say "It's got a 1.6L engine which'll do 40+mpg", but instead have some bloke ragging it round a mountain :) So you could possibly add some imagery of competition, ie. someone hitting a punchbag, to add to the idea of an unrelenting opponent.

I'm not saying you should change anything, rather suggesting alternatives if you wanted to use them.

Good work chap (Y)

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made your voice more:

distinctive

louder

stronger

more powerful

you know what i mean? make it stand out more rather than your just there reading off a sheet ( which i know you probably are!)

joE!

other than that i liked it

p.s, and the end, make the t.v symbol more central maybe, make it stand out, people need to know what channel it's on. even if the volumes down, get me?

(Y)

i liked it alot though!

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