good music ,
good editing but not over the top ,keeping it simple is nice ,
put some bails in , but not right at the end
just put it beetween clips as i find it makes me want to watch on.
there was nothign wrong with your other vid so just keep like that , .
maybe do a bit of slow mo , i dunno theres lots of things.
just dont go over the top.
cant wait to see it mate.
mini man :)