I thought it was a good effort at trying something a bit different. Really nicely shot, music would have been nice all the way through though i rekon. But yeah for an initial trail it prob should have been more punchy but thats obvoiusly not the angle you were coming from, which people dont seem to understand on here... looks like you were trying to reflect the laid-back side of trials, which to me is more valid, as it isn't a particularly agressive sport like bmxing. Anyhoo, i think that the idea is there, it just need pushing in a different direction. (btw i am a full time graphic designer so sorry if im bollocking on a bit!) Rob ps, like the shirt designs a lot, infact, i have some ideas of my own.... i'll be pming you shortly