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Hello, Right well i noticed my friend has a major talent,

Just wanted to show you's all some and to see what you think,(Please feel free to comment)

also list your music below if you want too.

If anyone is the music industry could you please let me know if you think he has potential.

If anyone would like too see more he has hundreds!

This is his latest Rap! (Its called provoke us)

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

We just gotta sit back , relax and focus

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

don’t let yourself tell yourself your hopeless

It doesn’t matter how many words, verbs or nouns

Ill never be able to spit clearly about they way we feel down

If aint about the opposite sex its about pricks

Pricks who think they’re smart but really they thick

Pricks that really tend to get under your very own wick

Knock down your confidence layers brick by brick

Your defence system once upon a time could’ve taken the fight

But nowadays its shattered and it seems to of scattered like mice

Nothing in life appears nice , always to rugged

Its not like it was electric and you could simply unplug it

Its always in your mind and it always rewinds

Back so you watch the images play in your head

Over and over again , even when you suffer you get no compensation

You just left under frustration of the nations desperation

Im personally sick of being so f**king provoked

Ive tried to stop but im the cause of over a million fags smoked

All the stress presses inside the layers, say your prayers

Cause you never know when the shit is gonna end

No clue, no simple view, just you and your days as they blacken

Not even god will know show you what’s to happen

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

We just gotta sit back , relax and focus

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

don’t let yourself tell yourself your hopeless

X2

No point asking a parent as a parent cant do the caring

Required to help you through the shit that can hit you in young years

You cry young tears among many fears and

You never know where to go or where you stand

Being under so much pressure is absurd and you think its just a phase

But it’s the sort of phase that don’t go away, it’s a maze

It’s the sort of maze where you will never find your ways

There only so much under this shit you’ll be able to take

And then you will reach the point where you will break

And when you break, you feel no more, you don’t ache

But believe me you don’t want that , for f**k sake

Try stay happy, try get a girl , even for lucks sake

Not one bit of truth comes from me, not one tear from my eyeball

And I wish I could pray to god, and relate to his bible

But I cant, so I get provoked and aim my fists at my wall

Who am I kidding to think that im finally ridding

My self of all the shit, and finding happiness should be my outlet

But its not, im stuck in this pit, the walls have demons who are clawing

And as for me, im constantly falling and I been doing so since the day I was crawling

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

We just gotta sit back , relax and focus

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

don’t let yourself tell yourself your hopeless

X2

Never let anyone know the real you on the inside

Just concentrate on the figures of the outside

Its these secrets we all keep, never open the door for a fanny to have a peak

I used to be a nice guy, hurt easily but really so forgiven

But now, ive been provoked so much accepting apologies if forbidden

Do I need to explain in detail, do I need to draw it out with a stencil

I have the pad and a pencil, all I need now is the instrumental

For everyone who makes it through shit another ten fall

Its like a war zone where every fanny is a soldier all locked up alone

Its amazing how everything changes, bullies become pussies who get pushed

Im used to the ideas of nightmares, never been rich, never had nike airs

Im aware I aint had it tough but I still had it worse than my friends

They all raised up fine whilst I gazed up to the skies , wonder why

Why am I here, cause it would appear I am here to fear

To fear all, I keep myself to myself, barely scrounge of many

Whether it be pounds or pennies I keep myself to myself by any means

I only intervene when necessary because shits on top of me

When I get provoked it all drops on me, I cant wait to see the light

Sit alone and reflect every f**king night, nothing ever goes smooth

But it’s the point of this story is what I need you all to approve on

No matter how much you stressed or provoked

Take every piece of bullshit as a joke.

That’s the best advise I ever heard so far in my life.

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

We just gotta sit back , relax and focus

There’s alota things in this world that provoke us

don’t let yourself tell yourself your hopeless

X2

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Is that Daniel's or Darren's?

Makes me want to write some more haha

Was rather beast song, sounds like something Pac or Eminem would make. Really good (Y)

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Is that Daniel's or Darren's?

Makes me want to write some more haha

Was rather beast song, sounds like something Pac or Eminem would make. Really good (Y)

Thats the good thing about his raps its not all about money and girls and cars, There about life and shizzle !

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Thats the good thing about his raps its not all about money and girls and cars, There about life and shizzle !

Which is why I never mentioned 50 cent.

;)

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Which is why I never mentioned 50 cent.

;)

Very True ! :giggle:

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Immortal Technique, the only rap I'll ever listen to...probably.

If it doesn't work out as a rap, maybe he's make it as a poet.

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Thats the good thing about his raps its not all about money and girls and cars, There about life and shizzle !

I hate people on youtube that say 'Eminem's good cos he doesn't rap about drugs, cars and girls but about real things!'

When just because the only song they've heard is Love The Way You Lie and infact the majority of his songs are about violence, girls and drugs.

Just sayin'

Are there any videos of your friend?

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I hate people on youtube that say 'Eminem's good cos he doesn't rap about drugs, cars and girls but about real things!'

When just because the only song they've heard is Love The Way You Lie and infact the majority of his songs are about violence, girls and drugs.

Just sayin'

Are there any videos of your friend?

Nope i will try get one this weekend for you's too see.

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Some nice metaphors and images, there's a few times where there's too many syllables and it sounded a bit awkward, and sometimes it seemed like it's just choosing a word so it'll rhyme, which happened a few times, and then it got a little erratic.

Biggie went all 'cars and bitches' and he was sweet as a nut.

Makes me want to write some more haha

ModifiedRappah2k9?

Yo', "my mate's got this it's properly sweet",

Don't believe me? Well I've got a receipt.

"Nah man, it's pure shit, it snapped in a week",

The lever fell off, and started to leak.

Choosing a frame mate? There's no need to jest,

I ride an Echo, and yeah, it's the best.

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ModifiedRappah2k9?

Yo', "my mate's got this it's properly sweet",

Don't believe me? Well I've got a receipt.

"Nah man, it's pure shit, it snapped in a week",

The lever fell off, and started to leak.

Choosing a frame mate? There's no need to jest,

I ride an Echo, and yeah, it's the best.

I love you.

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That was f**king gold.

And this forum has had enough shameless music plugs from me, and this one wont be another.

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That was f**king gold.

And this forum has had enough shameless music plugs from me, and this one wont be another.

I will pass on the compliment ! :turned:

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i write and play all my own music but not many of you will appriciate it so i wont show it :)

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i write and play all my own music but not many of you will appriciate it so i wont show it :)

Stop being such a defeatest, attetion-seeking moron...you want congratualtions for writing and playing, yet you're not going to open yourself up to those willing to listen........ go away then.

Me on the other hand i write and play all my own music (oohhh get me!) so get ready to hate and permanently horrify your ears:

www.myspace.com/aparallelsphere

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Same here, we write music to have fun. Doubt we'll make it far but it's such a good time at the practice studio. Good times.

www.myspace.com/mindofatyrantband

Listen out for a guest appearance from American dad. :shifty:

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http://soundcloud.com/revolver-1

The top one on there is the oldest song.

I have no idea how I recorded it so well, the quality of the recording and the sync shits on the latest track, 'This might be the real song'.

And it was a few years ago with my oldest, cheapest guitar. :S

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Stop being such a defeatest, attetion-seeking moron...you want congratualtions for writing and playing, yet you're not going to open yourself up to those willing to listen........ go away then.

Me on the other hand i write and play all my own music (oohhh get me!) so get ready to hate and permanently horrify your ears:

www.myspace.com/aparallelsphere

LOL

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ModifiedRappah2k9?

Yo', "my mate's got this it's properly sweet",

Don't believe me? Well I've got a receipt.

"Nah man, it's pure shit, it snapped in a week",

The lever fell off, and started to leak.

Choosing a frame mate? There's no need to jest,

I ride an Echo, and yeah, it's the best.

:wub:

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Stop being such a defeatest, attetion-seeking moron...you want congratualtions for writing and playing, yet you're not going to open yourself up to those willing to listen........ go away then.

Me on the other hand i write and play all my own music (oohhh get me!) so get ready to hate and permanently horrify your ears:

www.myspace.com/aparallelsphere

LMAO thank you mr for making me propper chuckle ....ive not had a good giggle all day long and you sir deliverd the goods......

look what happend the last time i OPEND UP on this forum ;)

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Exactly, which is why i don't give a shit if you can write a little song and sing about your feelings if you're not going to post away or presume that people won't like it. It's utterly pointless and without use. I meant people are willing/here to listen to music, not whining..

On another note, i can play every Jimi Hendrix song at once - but yeah, you guys wouldn't give a shit about that would you, you f**ks!

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I write music when I can't sleep sometimes, it's not something I take seriously but it's a nice release. Oh an Ninja, that was epic!

Random Verses

These rainy eyes make me think about life

As I turn away from my strife walk off into the night

I Need to try and resist fading away into the abyss

Cos I’m sure of little but I know this

Life we lead is frightfully fragile

The grim reaper chasing us is mightily agile

I must try an relish my time on earth live in laughter and mirth

But I understand this world is filled with sadness

So with rainy eyes I write words of madness

Through rainy eyes I look up to the sky

We live in a harsh world and I forever wonder why as I ponder through the night

But blinking back tears I step forward to face my fears

Knowing I have the support of my peers

Cos their comes a time when we must live up to our name

Celebrate our existence look forward to a better day

Stare to the sun without turning away, take happiness, forget to pay

So hold my hand and believe everything will be ok

It may feel like the rain will never be done but soon will come the rainbow and with it the sun

Think of the summer time and the days made of laughter and fun

Release yourself and run through the elysian fields

Open up your heart let down your shields

Cos you can only truly live once you learn to believe in life

Until then the fate of your soul lies on the edge of a knife

I know my destiny I know to let it be experience the worlds I’m yet to see

There is an afterlife and I’ve been given the key

I’ll float up to the skies looking down through rainy eyes, whisper my goodbyes

Leave my mark through tears falling to the ground

My body’s gone but the death of my spirit is never allowed

Stay forever surveying the world I thought I once knew

But slowly out grew as my spirituality moved on

Don’t mourn for me cos death is just a con

For we each live on in our own special way

Even if our bodies do rot and decay

I’m living through the music floating through your ears

Lounging in paradise aquanting myself with our overseers

But I’ll never forget about the people I once loved and still do

The memories of the place I once knew will forever shine through

I’ll always be thankful for showing me what it means to be free

You taught me how to live and I did it with glee

My life was unbelievable my achievements unachievable

I never listened to the people who said my goals were unfeasable

For if we don’t follow our dreams we are just shadows of beings

Covering cracks with the weakest of seams

Covering our tracks never looking to be remembered

An that’s not the purpose for which we were intended

The planets cleverest species blessed from death back to feces

But wasting our life in the daily grind then just staring at tvs

f**k that we must follow our hearts true desire

Elevate to a higher state and escape hells fire

Hypocritical

Society fails in an attempt to push the feelings away

We’ve found our world’s become worn down, it’s fabrics frayed

We do all we can to give off the impression of a made man

But also see it’s just a cover up like paint from a spray can

I’ve come to believe our whole attitude’s fake an

We all secretly know it, do all we can to never show it

Hiding behind the technology an the power we’ve created

Holding in our true feelings like we’re constipated

Do you ever feel like you’re whole life’s been wasted?

The same as the last, just copied and pasted

We can all dream but how many dreams are remembered?

Who meant what they said an who just pretended

If we all lived up to our truths the whole world would be mended

If we all kept our promises the poor would be protected

An we’re all hypocritical both intentionally and accidentally

That’s fine, just never claim to be revolutionary

Cos you made it like this, can’t you see?

An by you I mean everyone, including me

We’re prisoners in this selfish mentality

An under our control the world will never be free

Cos you made it like this, don’t you get it?

Try an forget it I know you’ll live to regret it

If God created this earth then why give us the key?

Cos under our control the world will never be free

We have to be hypocritical to preserve our sanity

It’s a viscous circle, a devastating mentality

One step forward for mankind, two back for humanity

We’re walking backwards, into a catastrophe

An if you’re thinkin credit crunch you need a munch on reality

Some don’t even have safe water an that’s the true tragedy

But thats a far away land we just see on the tv

Flick the channel see the queens speech, parading her royalty

But a diamond from her hat would feed a starving nation

For our race that’s counter productive like masturbation

Not to mention morally wrong like fornication

Every single one of us should be locked up down the pig station

An what can I do to fix it? I can’t work it out

I feel useless, just whispering when I need to shout

We need a revolutionary to break the dam start the rush

Cos lots of little whispers just make one big hush.

Cos you made it like this, can’t you see?

An by you I mean everyone, including me

We’re prisoners in this selfish mentality

An under our control the world will never be free

Cos you made it like this, can’t you see?

An by you I mean everyone, including me

If God created this earth then why give us the key?

Cos under our control the world will never be free

What happened to the world, as time unfurled?

It slowly clogged up, became knotted and knurled

Our hands red with it’s blood, one of our many sins

cancerous beings, the voodoo witch pushing in pins

We’re the antagonist an the judge from his booth just grins

Cos the judge is us and the one sided always wins

We need to step back objectively, observe our shortcomings

Take heed of our blessings, cut down on obsessions

Cos we can’t fix the problem till we fix ourselves

An nature’s giving us warnings the planets ringing bells

But like many whispers these words will bring no change

I fear I’m not strong enough to break us from this cage

But I’ve been torturing myself at night with these thoughts

The issue will never be clear cut like ones and noughts

But at least I can say I thought about my role

In freeing up my mind I’m gaining release for my soul

D&B Bars

You must understand, this is just the way it has to be

One step forward for mankind, two back for humanity

So I spit cryptic to preserve your sanity

Cos in this place, this time, there ent no room for vanity

Even a make up brush would cause calamity

Stare too long to the mirror, see catastrophe

An I find it harrowing how man are looking for a cause

To bring beef, break the laws an start wars

Cos they feel thats the way it needs to be

So they draw for the shank so easily

But thats something I refuse to take part in

An if that means I’m not hip hop then f**k you I be laughing

Cos we must always look forward to a better age

Like a ray of sunlight through the clouds in these dark days

Learn to understand his musics not about discrimination

An it’s not about guns, gangs or intimidation

It’s about love, peace and bringing people together

So whether you like it or not I’ll be reppin it forever.

You know, round these times a smile makes you look soft

Walk half mile the right way an youl still be lost

Cos we’re in the city, an we love it but its still shitty

The nitty leaves you feelin pity the gritty leaves you feelin giddy

Sick to your innersoul

See black in your peripheral

Vision, but through the jungle you continue the mission

Like machete to bush you make an incision

But the buzzing around me eats at my inner self

Slowly nibbles away at my health

An I can’t take it all in

The steady noise an constant din

Never ending rebuttals challenging my ego

So I must distance myself from it, breathe slow

As the train rocks me to and fro

I’m just another dreamer gazing out the window

Another wandering soul lost on the other side

Attached to another tired body, dragging behind.

Slump back, divided we sit

Seperate entities the yous and mes

Afraid to look to your face so they stare to your knees

Unaware of the inner demons you’re tryina appease

An they come and go but here I wait

Fluorescent lights rape my retinas

Aware the world above’s forgettin us

An we just wanna break free but noones lettin us

So I follow the gazes and up I soar

Reminiscing on a time in a life before

An in good memories I find myself lost

Cos the best things in this humble life don’t cost

A kind deed to restore your faith in humanity

A silent moment for peace and tranquility

An that’s all I need so please just let me have it

Give me an opportunity to break this bad habit

Make a decision

Cos in your life you must strive to avoid a collision

With the ones that will bring you down, hold your head high

Keep your shoulders back always look to the sky

An thats the philosophy I rep till the day that I die

I’ve accepted my fate don’t ask yourself why

It can’t be like when we were young

When the silver linings never stung

Could walk among the clouds without plummeting to the ground

But now I get my release through this sound

It’s called the drum and bass muuusiiic

So let me take you through this

Seldom an D yo I’ll show you how we do this

The selections ruthless make you dance till your shoeless.

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I write music when I can't sleep sometimes, it's not something I take seriously but it's a nice release. Oh an Ninja, that was epic!

Random Verses

These rainy eyes make me think about life

As I turn away from my strife walk off into the night

I Need to try and resist fading away into the abyss

Cos I’m sure of little but I know this

Life we lead is frightfully fragile

The grim reaper chasing us is mightily agile

I must try an relish my time on earth live in laughter and mirth

But I understand this world is filled with sadness

So with rainy eyes I write words of madness

Through rainy eyes I look up to the sky

We live in a harsh world and I forever wonder why as I ponder through the night

But blinking back tears I step forward to face my fears

Knowing I have the support of my peers

Cos their comes a time when we must live up to our name

Celebrate our existence look forward to a better day

Stare to the sun without turning away, take happiness, forget to pay

So hold my hand and believe everything will be ok

It may feel like the rain will never be done but soon will come the rainbow and with it the sun

Think of the summer time and the days made of laughter and fun

Release yourself and run through the elysian fields

Open up your heart let down your shields

Cos you can only truly live once you learn to believe in life

Until then the fate of your soul lies on the edge of a knife

I know my destiny I know to let it be experience the worlds I’m yet to see

There is an afterlife and I’ve been given the key

I’ll float up to the skies looking down through rainy eyes, whisper my goodbyes

Leave my mark through tears falling to the ground

My body’s gone but the death of my spirit is never allowed

Stay forever surveying the world I thought I once knew

But slowly out grew as my spirituality moved on

Don’t mourn for me cos death is just a con

For we each live on in our own special way

Even if our bodies do rot and decay

I’m living through the music floating through your ears

Lounging in paradise aquanting myself with our overseers

But I’ll never forget about the people I once loved and still do

The memories of the place I once knew will forever shine through

I’ll always be thankful for showing me what it means to be free

You taught me how to live and I did it with glee

My life was unbelievable my achievements unachievable

I never listened to the people who said my goals were unfeasable

For if we don’t follow our dreams we are just shadows of beings

Covering cracks with the weakest of seams

Covering our tracks never looking to be remembered

An that’s not the purpose for which we were intended

The planets cleverest species blessed from death back to feces

But wasting our life in the daily grind then just staring at tvs

f**k that we must follow our hearts true desire

Elevate to a higher state and escape hells fire

Hypocritical

Society fails in an attempt to push the feelings away

We’ve found our world’s become worn down, it’s fabrics frayed

We do all we can to give off the impression of a made man

But also see it’s just a cover up like paint from a spray can

I’ve come to believe our whole attitude’s fake an

We all secretly know it, do all we can to never show it

Hiding behind the technology an the power we’ve created

Holding in our true feelings like we’re constipated

Do you ever feel like you’re whole life’s been wasted?

The same as the last, just copied and pasted

We can all dream but how many dreams are remembered?

Who meant what they said an who just pretended

If we all lived up to our truths the whole world would be mended

If we all kept our promises the poor would be protected

An we’re all hypocritical both intentionally and accidentally

That’s fine, just never claim to be revolutionary

Cos you made it like this, can’t you see?

An by you I mean everyone, including me

We’re prisoners in this selfish mentality

An under our control the world will never be free

Cos you made it like this, don’t you get it?

Try an forget it I know you’ll live to regret it

If God created this earth then why give us the key?

Cos under our control the world will never be free

We have to be hypocritical to preserve our sanity

It’s a viscous circle, a devastating mentality

One step forward for mankind, two back for humanity

We’re walking backwards, into a catastrophe

An if you’re thinkin credit crunch you need a munch on reality

Some don’t even have safe water an that’s the true tragedy

But thats a far away land we just see on the tv

Flick the channel see the queens speech, parading her royalty

But a diamond from her hat would feed a starving nation

For our race that’s counter productive like masturbation

Not to mention morally wrong like fornication

Every single one of us should be locked up down the pig station

An what can I do to fix it? I can’t work it out

I feel useless, just whispering when I need to shout

We need a revolutionary to break the dam start the rush

Cos lots of little whispers just make one big hush.

Cos you made it like this, can’t you see?

An by you I mean everyone, including me

We’re prisoners in this selfish mentality

An under our control the world will never be free

Cos you made it like this, can’t you see?

An by you I mean everyone, including me

If God created this earth then why give us the key?

Cos under our control the world will never be free

What happened to the world, as time unfurled?

It slowly clogged up, became knotted and knurled

Our hands red with it’s blood, one of our many sins

cancerous beings, the voodoo witch pushing in pins

We’re the antagonist an the judge from his booth just grins

Cos the judge is us and the one sided always wins

We need to step back objectively, observe our shortcomings

Take heed of our blessings, cut down on obsessions

Cos we can’t fix the problem till we fix ourselves

An nature’s giving us warnings the planets ringing bells

But like many whispers these words will bring no change

I fear I’m not strong enough to break us from this cage

But I’ve been torturing myself at night with these thoughts

The issue will never be clear cut like ones and noughts

But at least I can say I thought about my role

In freeing up my mind I’m gaining release for my soul

D&B Bars

You must understand, this is just the way it has to be

One step forward for mankind, two back for humanity

So I spit cryptic to preserve your sanity

Cos in this place, this time, there ent no room for vanity

Even a make up brush would cause calamity

Stare too long to the mirror, see catastrophe

An I find it harrowing how man are looking for a cause

To bring beef, break the laws an start wars

Cos they feel thats the way it needs to be

So they draw for the shank so easily

But thats something I refuse to take part in

An if that means I’m not hip hop then f**k you I be laughing

Cos we must always look forward to a better age

Like a ray of sunlight through the clouds in these dark days

Learn to understand his musics not about discrimination

An it’s not about guns, gangs or intimidation

It’s about love, peace and bringing people together

So whether you like it or not I’ll be reppin it forever.

You know, round these times a smile makes you look soft

Walk half mile the right way an youl still be lost

Cos we’re in the city, an we love it but its still shitty

The nitty leaves you feelin pity the gritty leaves you feelin giddy

Sick to your innersoul

See black in your peripheral

Vision, but through the jungle you continue the mission

Like machete to bush you make an incision

But the buzzing around me eats at my inner self

Slowly nibbles away at my health

An I can’t take it all in

The steady noise an constant din

Never ending rebuttals challenging my ego

So I must distance myself from it, breathe slow

As the train rocks me to and fro

I’m just another dreamer gazing out the window

Another wandering soul lost on the other side

Attached to another tired body, dragging behind.

Slump back, divided we sit

Seperate entities the yous and mes

Afraid to look to your face so they stare to your knees

Unaware of the inner demons you’re tryina appease

An they come and go but here I wait

Fluorescent lights rape my retinas

Aware the world above’s forgettin us

An we just wanna break free but noones lettin us

So I follow the gazes and up I soar

Reminiscing on a time in a life before

An in good memories I find myself lost

Cos the best things in this humble life don’t cost

A kind deed to restore your faith in humanity

A silent moment for peace and tranquility

An that’s all I need so please just let me have it

Give me an opportunity to break this bad habit

Make a decision

Cos in your life you must strive to avoid a collision

With the ones that will bring you down, hold your head high

Keep your shoulders back always look to the sky

An thats the philosophy I rep till the day that I die

I’ve accepted my fate don’t ask yourself why

It can’t be like when we were young

When the silver linings never stung

Could walk among the clouds without plummeting to the ground

But now I get my release through this sound

It’s called the drum and bass muuusiiic

So let me take you through this

Seldom an D yo I’ll show you how we do this

The selections ruthless make you dance till your shoeless.

Do you free-style ?

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